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The graph below gives information about how much people in the United States and the United Kingdom spend on petrol. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about how much people in the United States and the United Kingdom spend on petrol. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates how much
people
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 from U.S.A and UK spend on fuel.
Overall
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, it can be seen that these two lines are completely different, the lighter one that represents
United
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 Kingdom start from a lower percentage of
income
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,
instead
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 of the other one accounting for 4% at the starting point. American
people
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 and English
people
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 spend their money on fuel in a totally different
way
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.
At more
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 wide look reveal that the poorest
people
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 in the U.S. spend more than UK citizens, indeed the highest percentage they have is almost 3%, a dramatic difference respect the 5.5% of
income
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 that Americans make up. The black line increases a little bit and
then
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 suddenly falls. Between the middle-
income
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 and the richest
people
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, the two lines are identical at some point which is represented by the 4% of the
income
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. The English
people
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 line is steadier than the other one but both have a drop in the richest part. The greatest decrease in the percentage of
income
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 is in the United States where it seems that the richest
people
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 spend less than the poorest ones on fuel.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "represents" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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