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A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday fort he first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your. In your letter •explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday •describe some possible disadvantages •say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer Write at least 150 words.

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Dear Emily, I haven't seen you for a long
time
 so I am very excited to meet you. I know that you are thinking of going on a camping holiday
this
summer
 for the first
time
. I am very happy about that and I am always ready to give you some advice. A camping holiday is a wonderful idea. Especially
this
summer
. I think that not only do you want to go camping on holiday in
summer
 but
also
 a
lot
 of people because
that is
 the best
time
 for people to enjoy life after a hard working day. One of the most important reasons why you should go camping is that you are able to see the views and meet a
lot
 of people.
That is
 a chance for you to understand more about a
lot
 of cultures in our country which you have never known before. The other reason is that you can take part in some social activities which are very interesting.
On the other hand
, there are some disadvantages. In the first place, it will have a negative impact on your skin so you have to wear a hat before going camping outside.
Secondly
, it is easy for you to be ill because the weather in
summer
 is quite hot so you have to prepare medicines before. I would
also
 like to go camping with you
this
summer
 because I have a
lot
 of free
time
. I will be waiting for your reply. Hope to meet soon. Your close friend.
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