Many people are using credits cards or loans to run up huge personal debts that they may be unable to repay. it should therefore be made more difficult for individuals to borrow large amounts of money. What are your opinion on this.

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Recent global events have resulted in the price increase of several basic commodities making a ripple effect in many aspects of the economy making “living within your means” quite difficult for the majority of society. To adapt to the growing prices,
people
have turned to using
credit
cards or loaning sizable money that will eventually bury them in debt. Applying for loans or
credit
cards has been very accessible to the community and unknowing of the charges that come with borrowing hefty amounts of funds,
people
tend to continuously borrow without considering the consequences.
While
some use these commodities for purchasing necessities, most
credit
card users utilize them for leisure and pleasure purposes, meaning these
people
are trying to live outside of their means.
For example
, two adults apply for a loan, one uses it to buy basic needs
such
as food because his wage has been delayed
while
the other uses it for travel. One is able to pay once he gets his salary
while
the other lives lavishly and carelessly and is unable to pay.
This
careless person
then
accumulates surcharges because of late fees and earns interest
then
eventually leaves himself in debt.
Therefore
, banks and other firms should make it more difficult to loan substantial amounts of money. They should require more qualifications from applicants and
also
do background checks so they can check if the applicant is able to pay in the future.
Credit
cards or loans have helped many
people
by lending them to purchase their wants or needs. And
although
there are multiple benefits, the consequences of paying should still be the priority of lendees when applying for these loans.  In conclusion, both the lender and the person borrowing still have responsibilities that need checking.
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