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Some people think that the news channels and media nowadays have sensationalized and influenced people’s lives in negative ways. Others disagree and say that is also positive. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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One of the most conspicuous trends of today's world is, how the media and news channels affect and influence the public. There is widespread worry that
this
 only leads to a myriad of concerns in society. In my opinion,
this
 apprehension is warranted and merits serious consideration, I agree with
this
 essay because the population are easily influenced.
Firstly
, there are several arguments in favour of my stance. The most preponderant is that many journalists use to offer their news from a subjective point of view
according to
 their perspective not telling the whole story. To elaborate
further
, having to attract the attention of as many people as possible, they try to make an event as fascinating as possible and as big as possible
according to
 "Times Magazine December 2021 Ediction" if the news appears in a greater volume the possibility of making money as fundraisers are higher.
For example
, a clear example is that of showing undernourished children in Africa and making a breach in people's sensitivity to ask to adopt them. Another overt facet of the tell what really happens in the world is in war territories tell the stories of those who have lost everything.
Furthermore
,the complete report to understand why people emigrate from their country of origin to seek hope in another land, and why they are willing to risk their lives to look for something better.
for instance
 it is easy to raise awareness of migration of family if you show the tanks and bombs, like the Russian war, the more difficult it becomes the story of Africans and they are in the same situation but you don't show the whole story In view of the arguments outlined above, it can be concluded that all these advantages are really terrible to ignore. It is recommended that all media should always provide the full picture of the situation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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