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The maps below show the changes experienced by the town of Lakeside at the beginning of the 21st Century.

The maps below show the changes experienced by the town of Lakeside at the beginning of the 21st Century.
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The maps illustrate the developments which occurred in the town of Lakeside over a 9-year period from 2000 to 2009. In 2000, the town was a much greener residential area with a bigger number of trees, but during the next 9 ,years the town experienced a number of dramatic changes. The most noticeable is that all of the trees southeast of the river were chopped down, with the industrial complex and residential area being knocked down and replaced by a huge industrial complex. Derelict warehouses and
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old towns in the north of Lakeside gave way to the car park and offices.
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, the shopping centre, schools and universities sprang up along the river. By 2009, the lake had
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shrunk to the size of a pond.
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 developments were the construction of a multi-screen cinema north of the shopping centre
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 of an arts centre.
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, a comparison of the two maps reveals a change from a rural to a mainly urban landscape.

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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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