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The differences between countries are becoming less and less evident, as people all over the world wear the same fashions, use the same brands, have similar eating habits and watch the same TV channels. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh its disadvantages?

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People
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 around the
world
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 have their own traditions and
culture
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. Every country
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 their own history and background.
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, I completely agree with the statement that
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 among countries
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 now becoming less and less evident.
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, the internet and other social applications have made the
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 very close. All the
people
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 around the globe now have
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knowledge of fashion and brands
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because
people
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 have easy access
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internet
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 from where they watch what's trending and follow them.
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,
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people
 have the same eating habits. For
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, now eating pizza and junk food is becoming more popular
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, a few decades ago no one knows about these things. All
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because
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 little.
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, the urge of
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 to travel around
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have
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also
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 made it easy for everyone to buy from the brands and wear
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similar fashion. Today,
people
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 like to adopt different
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culture
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cultures
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 and eating habits of others they like.
People
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 like to watch the same TV shows as they want to go with
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.
People
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 could relate
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 their situations easily.
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, where
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 trend has
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a lot
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 has some drawbacks. As
people
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losing their identity
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from where they belong? what was their
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? and what their forefathers
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 Today, the new generation wants to go with the trend and
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 forgotten their past values.
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, their forefathers
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 to stick with their
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 creates a gap between them.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global community
  • interconnectedness
  • cultural exchange
  • global brands
  • economic benefits
  • shared prosperity
  • cultural identity
  • cultural diversity
  • environmental impact
  • local customs
  • local businesses
  • economic difficulties
  • adaptation
  • culture shock
  • dominance
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