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Band 5.5

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
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Linking Words
This
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These
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 two maps illustrate how to arrive
the
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at the
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City
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 hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
Overall
Linking Words
, in 2007
their
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 is only one
access
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 in
enter
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centre
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 to
hospital
Correct article usage
the hospital
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.
Year
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The year
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 2010 it
is change
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is changed
is changing
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 to other several
access
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. The bus stop place changed
in
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to
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other
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another
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 location and additional three roundabouts
added
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were added
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 to the new map. The
City
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 hospital
in
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apply
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2007, it has one pathway in
enter
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entering
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 to
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city
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the city
a city
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 hospital.
Their
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There
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 are many trees
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besides
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beside
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 the hospital
road
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.
Staff
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The staff
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car
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park
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 and
public
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the public
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car
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park
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is
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are
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 situated
on
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in
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same
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the same
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 place and it is
right
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the right
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side
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 of the hospital
road
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. The bus
stop
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stops
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far
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is far
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 away from the hospital and it is located on
East
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the East
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Side
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 of
on
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apply
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it.
New
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The new
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 plan in 2010,
it
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apply
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has lots of
changers
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changes
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 in
hospital
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the hospital
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city
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 area. They are adding another
access
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 on
hospital
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the hospital
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road
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buy
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by
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theway
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the way
their
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there
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 are three roundabouts added to
this
Linking Words
 map, two are
in
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on
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 hospital
road
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 and
other
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the other
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on
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is on
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the eastside
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eastside
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east side
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 of the hospital
road
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. Bus stop
place
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is place
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in
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on
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left
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the left
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side
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 of
hospital
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the hospital
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road
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 and it
more close
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closer
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 to
hospital
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the hospital
a hospital
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. The staff
car
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park
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 and public
car
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park
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separated
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are separated
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 and
staff
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the staff
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park
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close
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is close
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 to
hospital
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the hospital
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road
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. Public
car
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park
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 in East
Side
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 of
hospital
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the hospital
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both
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apply
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have different
access
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 to
hospital
Add an article
the hospital
a hospital
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, access, road, car, park, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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