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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate at fast-food shops between 2003 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate at fast-food shops between 2003 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the percentages of the United States population who have their
meals
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 at junk-food restaurants over the course of 10 years. Units are measured in percentages. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that the majority of the community had unhealthy
meals
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 once a
week
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,
whereas
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 the fewest people preferred to eat junk food every day.
Moreover
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, the frequency of consuming
such
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 food changed
according to
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 the years.
According to
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 the graph, almost 4% of
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 consumed fast-food every day in 2003 and it decreased to reach roughly 2% and levelled off in 2006. In comparison, people who never had
such
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meals
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 showed a similar pattern and the consumption rate was 5% in 2003. and it plateaued at approximately 2%.
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, the frequency of several times a
week
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 and once a
week
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 had similar figures but individuals who ate fast food once a
week
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 larger in proportion (an average of 30% for ten years), followed by consumers who consume unhealthy
meals
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 once/twice a month. (the mean was around 28%). Approximately 14% of the population have
such
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meals
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 a few times per year.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, moreover, such".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words meals, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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