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In the future all cars, buses and truckss will be driverless. The inly people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
this
 modern era, development in cutting-edge technologies providing enormous benefits to
the
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people but some folks consider these technological advancements can produce adverse
affects
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 on our daily.
While
 others argue and claim that these contemporary advancements can bring ease
in
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 our daily
life
. In many ways,
introduction
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 of hand-free
cars
 can bring enormous benefits in multiple domains
such
 as
moderen
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modern
 day problems associated with
traffic
congestions
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at
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 city centres can be avoided as these
cars
 would be inbuilt
intellgent
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intelligent
intelligence
 to manage the flow of
traffic
.
Moreover
,
traffic
inccidents
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incidents
accidents
 will be significantly reduced as self-driven
cars
 will be based on machine learning algorithms which can eliminate any risk of incidents and collisions.
Furthermore
, a vast amount of real estate would be saved in terms of parking vehicles as people will avoid personal
cars
 and prefer to commute
on
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driver less
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 vehicles. The concept of integrating multidisciplined technological domains into
a self-driven
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a self-driven car
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cars
have
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 produced a daunting challenge which may lead to
the
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inevitable consequences
such
 as cyber security threats. To illustrate
this
further
,
driver less
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cars
 would be a combination of electronic and mechanical devices which will be connected through any
centrailzed
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centralized
 data server through
an
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 internet.
Therefore
, in case of any jeopardization
into
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 the cyber
network
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 it will produce serious threats to the
life
 of the passenger and may
compromised
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 the personal details of the travellers.
In addition
, these hands-free
cars
 may have a very short
life
 cycle as these
cars
 would be based on electronic circuitry and in case of any failure in its
componentry
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 a complete replacement of
unit
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 would be required.
For example
, in traditional
cars
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,cars
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 we may have
a
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 option to apply
quick fix
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 solutions to make it run
whereas
, in
these
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 we may not have that leverage to repair
thus
 a complete replacement of
vehicle
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 may require in case of any malfunctioning. In conclusion, I believe
evolution
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 of technology is so rapid that we have not updated ourselves to counter its negative consequences.
Although
 the adaption of
driver less
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cars
 may help to curb
modern day
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traffic
 challenges, still its downsides may have
a
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far-reaching
effects
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 which can
risks
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 our property and
life
.
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