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The chart below gives information about birth and death rates in Switzerland from 1970 to 2020 according to UN statistics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about birth and death rates in Switzerland from 1970 to 2020 according to UN statistics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts compare the
number
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 of
births
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 and deaths from 1970 to 2020 in Switzerland. In general, the ratio of
births
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 was higher than the rate of deaths, except in 1980.
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, more babies were born
while
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 the
number
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 of
people
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 who died decreased over
this
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 50-year period. Looking at the graph for more detail, the birth rate in 1970 was about 1.3
million
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people
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, which was more than 0.3
million
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 dead
people
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.
By contrast
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, in 1980,
people
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 who died in Switzerland (1.4
million
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) were slightly higher than
people
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 who were born (1.35
million
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). After 10 years, the
number
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 of
births
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 rose to around 1.7
million
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people
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while
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this
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 figure for the death decreased to 1.5
million
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 inhabitants. In 2000, the ratio of
births
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 increased significantly to reach 2.7
million
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,
while
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 there was a downward trend of deaths (1.1
million
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). After
10-year
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a 10-year
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 period, the
number
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 of
people
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 who were born continued to grow to approximately 3
million
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people
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,
while
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this
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 figure for dead
people
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 was 1
million
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.
This
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 trend continued to the year 2020, the birth and death rate in
this
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 country was 3.2
million
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people
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, which was the peak in
this
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 period and 0.8
million
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people
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 respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, births, people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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