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The chart below gives information about birth and death rates in Switzerland from 1970 to 2020 according to UN statistics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about birth and death rates in Switzerland from 1970 to 2020 according to UN statistics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts compare the
number
 of
births
 and deaths from 1970 to 2020 in Switzerland. In general, the ratio of
births
 was higher than the rate of deaths, except in 1980.
Moreover
, more babies were born
while
 the
number
 of
people
 who died decreased over
this
 50-year period. Looking at the graph for more detail, the birth rate in 1970 was about 1.3
million
people
, which was more than 0.3
million
 dead
people
.
By contrast
, in 1980,
people
 who died in Switzerland (1.4
million
) were slightly higher than
people
 who were born (1.35
million
). After 10 years, the
number
 of
births
 rose to around 1.7
million
people
while
this
 figure for the death decreased to 1.5
million
 inhabitants. In 2000, the ratio of
births
 increased significantly to reach 2.7
million
,
while
 there was a downward trend of deaths (1.1
million
). After
10-year
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 period, the
number
 of
people
 who were born continued to grow to approximately 3
million
people
,
while
this
 figure for dead
people
 was 1
million
.
This
 trend continued to the year 2020, the birth and death rate in
this
 country was 3.2
million
people
, which was the peak in
this
 period and 0.8
million
people
 respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, births, people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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