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In order to solve traffic problems, govt should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. what are advantages and disadvantages of the solution

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The governance in clarifying traffic difficulties decides to charge those with personal automation more tax and use the fund to upgrade public transit.
This
 essay will discuss the positive and negative aspects of the solution
To begin
 with,the government charging more taxes on private automation and using the money to better society's transportation will help civilians who cannot afford to buy their own
cars
 to convey them to their destination.
Also
, it will serve as a source of generating income for the government
as a result
 of the public
transport
 taking a menial amount from
people
 who take it. The money can be used for fixing bad roads.
In addition
, it will create employment for
people
 who can drive.
According to
 a survey done among citizens of Ghana, the majority of
people
 take public
transport
 because it speeds up their journey and they are charging a small amount of fare.
However
,when the population who use their own
cars
 are charged a huge tax, most
people
 will lose interest in buying their own
cars
 which will result in the increase take of public transportation in which the
transport
 can be overloaded with
people
 and will make them feel uncomfortable.
For example
, in Bangladesh, because much tax is imposed on private car owners, most
people
 take society
transport
 which exceeds the number it supposes to take making
people
 feel uncomfortable. In conclusion, the government charging more taxes on private
cars
 and using the money to better society's transportation will help civilians who cannot afford to buy their own
cars
 to convey them to their destination.
Conversely
, it will put much pressure on the use of public
transport
.
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