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Nowdays , more and more people decide to have children at a later age . what do you think that are the major reason for this ? Do the advantages of this trend outweigh disadvantages ?

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Family planning has become too mainstream among young
couples
. Nowadays people usually prefer to start a family at a later age. usually, career is the main reason for
such
 planning. But I think it is a bit risky as
couples
 typically don't conceive later when they want to have children. Husband and wife after their mutual decision prefer to focus on their careers in their initial stages of marriage or usually want to travel around more.
Therefore
 they decide to take birth control until they are entirely ready for
such
 responsibility. they mostly want to become parents with their whole hearts without worrying about their careers and goals. Frankly speaking, as medical studies have proved,
couples
 taking birth control for a long
peroid
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period
 face difficulty in conceiving after that. These birth control pills
also
 cause hormonal
imbalance
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 and eventually cause mood instability and several other medical issues.So
this
 trend of avoiding starting
family
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 is not a good idea for many partners. In conclusion,Most
of
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the
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newly weds
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feels
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 not ready to start
family
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 immediately
due to
 their other priorities but in a way
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 not quite
favorable
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 for many
couples
.
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