Some cities create housing areas by providing taller buildings. Others create housing by building houses on a wider area of land. What solution is better?

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residencial
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areas. One is constructing taller buildings and another is creating housing in wide areas. In my opinion, having tall buildings are more beneficial since they take
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and can regroup many people at the same time. As
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we have to think about the environment and what our
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may cause. Having wide areas of land implies cutting down more trees,
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causing a bad impact on
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nature. Trees are very vital to all living things. It provides shelter,
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and even
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us from landslides. If we cut them, we will take
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, force them to leave their natural habitat and we may cause
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disaster
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, which in turn will negatively affect our environment.
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, if we construct taller houses
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will be no need to take down trees and neither take
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place. We can build as many floors as we want or need. One example
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skyscrapers. They don´t take
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as we would
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and many people can live in them. One example is the tallest building in the world in United Emirates
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. It has more than 100 floors and I would estimate
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more than 1000 families could live there. Now, imagine if we had to open a
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in land for 1000 families
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The impact would be tremendously bad. In conclusion, having infrastructures that
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avoinding
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destruction of our mother nature is preferable. It does not bring negative effects
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our planet.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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  • sustainability
  • public transportation
  • green spaces
  • community connections
  • overcrowding
  • economic implications
  • infrastructure impact
  • maintenance costs
  • carbon footprint
  • compact city
  • habitat destruction
  • greenhouse gas emissions
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