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Some cities create housing areas by providing taller buildings. Others create housing by building houses on a wider area of land. What solution is better?

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There are two options related to building
a
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residencial
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residential
 areas. One is constructing taller buildings and another is creating housing in wide areas. In my opinion, having tall buildings are more beneficial since they take
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space
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 and can regroup many people at the same time. As
humans
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 we have to think about the environment and what our
action
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 may cause. Having wide areas of land implies cutting down more trees,
consequently
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 causing a bad impact on
the
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nature. Trees are very vital to all living things. It provides shelter,
food
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and food
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 and even
protect
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 us from landslides. If we cut them, we will take
animals
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, force them to leave their natural habitat and we may cause
natural
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disaster
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, which in turn will negatively affect our environment.
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, if we construct taller houses
their
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 will be no need to take down trees and neither take
animals
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 place. We can build as many floors as we want or need. One example
are
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 skyscrapers. They don´t take
as
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many
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space
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 as we would
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 and many people can live in them. One example is the tallest building in the world in United Emirates
Arabics
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Arabic
. It has more than 100 floors and I would estimate
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 more than 1000 families could live there. Now, imagine if we had to open a
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 in land for 1000 families
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 The impact would be tremendously bad. In conclusion, having infrastructures that
occupies
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 less
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avoinding
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avoiding
 destruction of our mother nature is preferable. It does not bring negative effects
to
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 our planet.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban density
  • sustainability
  • public transportation
  • green spaces
  • community connections
  • overcrowding
  • economic implications
  • infrastructure impact
  • maintenance costs
  • carbon footprint
  • compact city
  • habitat destruction
  • greenhouse gas emissions
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