Some people believe that social media sites, such as Facebook or Twitter, have a negative impact on young people and their ability to form personal relationships. Others believe that these sites bring people together in a beneficial way. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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social media become the medium of communication. Some people believe that

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of these social

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way to the young people,

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way to build relationships. Personally, I am in favour of the latter view.

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consume so much amount of time. A person who is using is not aware

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much time it is taking.

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to these sites that they forget to sleep sometimes.

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, using these sites without time monitoring can be dangerous.

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Prediction or recommendation

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In a nutshell
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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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