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"Technology is advancing at a rapid pace and is changing the way we live, work, and communicate. Some people think the rapid pace of technological development is beneficial, while others are concerned about its potential negative effects. Discuss both views and give your own opinion."

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The rapid pace of technological advancement has changed how
people
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 live, work and communicate. Some believe that it is a positive development,
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, there are some who disagree.
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 knowing that there is a possible downside to it, I believe that the benefits far outweigh the drawbacks. The forthcoming paragraph will discuss both views and provides an opinion
at the end
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. On the one hand, the advancement of
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 has successfully aided most human activities, particularly in tackling their limited ability.
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, we can take communication using the
internet
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,
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,
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 development has improved the dissemination of information. Nowadays,
people
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 can consume news from any part of the world easier, which is nearly impossible in the past because
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technology
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 did not exist.
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, the
internet
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 of things can
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 be detrimental to society,
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 what it offers to help
people
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, it could result in human
being
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beings
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 too attached to the
internet
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 or
technology
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 in general.
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 means can deteriorate the ethical physical effort of
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, one can be taken
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 improvement for granted and be lazy with less effort on a daily basis because they always rely on
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. Having said that, with the likelihood of becoming an individual with a lack of effort, many
people
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 have showcased a more productive attitude using the
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.
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, there are some
people
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 that are immensely productive because of the
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,
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 as the founders of some of the state-of-the-art
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 companies like google, or apple, that incorporate the aid of
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 for the development of their businesses. All in all, even though
technology
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 may trigger
people
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 to be dependent, it provides more benefits to society.
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, there is evidence
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 that
people
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 are becoming more productive with
technology
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.
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