In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food.
These days, we are surrounded by junk
food
, you can find it even at the supermarket and this
is a significant problem for all the people
who have difficulties eating in a healthy way. Some persons
believe that governments should impose a higher tax to increase the prices of Replace the word
people
this
food
. In this
essay, I will discuss why I strongly agree with this
main point of view which I believe that it is one of the most effective ways to help.
In some countries every day the number of obese people
is increasing, we do not talk only about adults, children with this
disease are a crucial problem too. These kids are often bullied at school and this
situation can even cause premature depression in a child who probably feels alone and without any friends. The United States is one of the countries around the world with the highest number of obese people
, thus
a lot of research were
conducted by American professional figures and University, which confirmed that a bad diet increases the probability of health problems Change the verb form
was
due to
obesity which are
both physical and psychological Change the verb form
is
such
as ictus, heart attack, limit movements, the need of oxygen, loneliness and even, suicide thoughts.
Some people
believe that governments must try to limit junk food
by imposing a higher cost on it. The prices at
fast Change preposition
of
food
are very low, for example
at Mcdonald's or Burger King one hamburger costs only 1.5 euros (in Italy) thus
, it is clear that
people
prefer to buy a prepared meal, instead
of cooking for themselves. I believe that is
necessary finding
solutions to help these Change the verb form
to find
people
and also
to prevent obesity, maybe it would be helpful that expert dietitians, once a month have a lesson in some schools from primary to high school, and why to
not start Change preposition
apply
this
program also
for adults at work.
Change the punctuation
?
To conclude
, preventing and limiting obesity is necessary and governments must help. In this
essay, I discussed this
main point of view, and I explained why I strongly agree with it.Submitted by robertasottile.rbst on
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