In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food.

These days, we are surrounded by junk
food
, you can find it even at the supermarket and
this
is a significant problem for all the
people
who have difficulties eating in a healthy way. Some
persons
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believe that governments should impose a higher tax to increase the prices of
this
food
. In
this
essay, I will discuss why I strongly agree with
this
main point of view which I believe that it is one of the most effective ways to help. In some countries every day the number of obese
people
is increasing, we do not talk only about adults, children with
this
disease are a crucial problem too. These kids are often bullied at school and
this
situation can even cause premature depression in a child who probably feels alone and without any friends. The United States is one of the countries around the world with the highest number of obese
people
,
thus
a lot of research
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conducted by American professional figures and University, which confirmed that a bad diet increases the probability of health problems
due to
obesity which
are
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both physical and psychological
such
as ictus, heart attack, limit movements, the need of oxygen, loneliness and even, suicide thoughts. Some
people
believe that governments must try to limit junk
food
by imposing a higher cost on it. The prices
at
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fast
food
are very low,
for example
at Mcdonald's or Burger King one hamburger costs only 1.5 euros (in Italy)
thus
,
it is clear that
people
prefer to buy a prepared meal,
instead
of cooking for themselves. I believe
that is
necessary
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solutions to help these
people
and
also
to prevent obesity, maybe it would be helpful that expert dietitians, once a month have a lesson in some schools from primary to high school, and why
to
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not start
this
program
also
for adults at work
.
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To conclude
, preventing and limiting obesity is necessary and governments must help. In
this
essay, I discussed
this
main point of view, and I explained why I strongly agree with it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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