The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.
The charts illustrate data about online shopping
sales
in New Zealand in both 2003 and 2013.
Overall
, it can be seen that in 2003, the travel sector had the greatest
percentage
of online
sales
, but in 2013, it experienced a decrease of 29%. All categories showed changes in their
percentage
of online
sales
over the years. Taking a closer look, in 2003, clothes had the second-highest
percentage
of online
sales
at 24%.
However
, film and music accounted for 21%, which was a very similar result. In 2013, the
sales
of books increased slightly, reaching 22%.
This
rise
also
happened in the sector of film and music, which increased by more than 10% in their online
sales
in New Zealand. Unfortunately, the sector of clothes
also
experienced a decline in 2013, losing almost 10% of its
sales
, dropping from 24% to 16%. Travel online
sales
reached their peak at 36% in 2003, which was the highest
percentage
in both pie charts."
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  • Comparative analysis
  • E-commerce
  • Retail sectors
  • Growth rate
  • Decade
  • Decline
  • Trends
  • Online transactions
  • Consumer behavior
  • Market share
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Digital era
  • Accessibility
  • User-friendly platform
  • Market dynamics
  • Predictive outlook
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