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The tables below give the distribution of world population in 1950 and 2000, with an estimate of the situation in 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give the distribution of world population in 1950 and 2000, with an estimate of the situation in 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates data about the number of
people
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 distributed all around the world, over a hundred-year period between 1950 and 2050. Units are measured by billions and percentages. As can be seen from the tables, until 2050 Africa is the only region where the
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people
Correct quantifier usage
number of people

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 is expected to increase, and
also
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 is expected a significant reduction in Europe.
Moreover
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, the only bonus that has a fluctuation belongs to Asia. In 1950, the world community in Africa was 9% and it is predicted that in 2050 the crowd will almost more than double.
That is
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 to say, Africa will include one-fifth of the globe’s society.
On the other hand
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, the figure for Europe’s
people
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 is going to fall by 15% in 2050,
while
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, in 1950 the percentage of the
people
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 was 22%.
Besides
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, among areas, Asia is the only continent that has a fluctuation. In 1950, the number of
people
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 was 56% which had the largest society in the world. After 50 years it goes up to 60% but it is estimated that
this
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 number will decrease to 59% in 2050. In Latin America and North America, the percentage just will have a minor change of about 3%. And
also
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 Oceania will not change and remain stable.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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