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Women are better at childcare than men therefore they should focus more on raising children and less on their working life. To what extents do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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There is a lively debate nowadays about which parents can do better care of their
children
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. There is a belief that
children
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 are the responsibility of
women
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 and
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 they should focus on raising heir neither on their careers. I totally disagree with
this
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 statement and I shall discuss my point of view in ahead paragraph. It has been considered since the beginning child is the liability of the mother ,not the father.
Women
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's duty is only to take care of the scion and the house neither careers nor taking care of themselves.
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 argument has been raised for decades, men are only to earn money. Even though,In present times
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 thought is truly wrong. Men and
women
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 are equally responsible for household duties
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children
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. Especially,In the urban world,
women
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 are independent and graduate, they are able to do jobs as well run the business.
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, In research tons of
women
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 are doing both, they are raising their
children
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 earning money. They are not dependent on any men. That said , there should be gender equality.
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 issue persists in female-dominated lives;
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, there are plenty of reasons why
women
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 should only focus on the house or childcare.
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, In India
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 a lack of knowledge in small countries girls are not allowed to study or do any other activity.
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, in some ,countries
women
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 are not even allowed to go out for small things. It is generally accepted that equality is a must, only
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 every country of the world can grow.
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, we should make a positive change. At some point most importantly, I personally believe that freedom and independence must be for
women
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. Raising offspring is both parent responsibility.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • primary caregivers
  • biological factors
  • maternal instincts
  • nurturing
  • workforce
  • career growth
  • income equality
  • family dynamics
  • shared responsibility
  • gender stereotypes
  • economic disparities
  • traditional roles
  • modern family
  • active roles in childcare
  • opportunity and support
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