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A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this fact.

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In today's world every individual is occupied in his life, spending vacations is the only and effective stressbuster.
Therefore
,
masses
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 enjoy their holidays in the limited tourist
hot-spots
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, thereby putting immense pressure on the available resources.
Therefore
,
tourism
 has benefits and
drawback
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drawbacks
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, which will be enlisted in
this
 essay. The most crucial benefit of
tourism
, it generates
employement
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employment
 for the local people, namely hotel staff,
transpoters
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transporters
, and guides, so these
staff
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 become bread
earner
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earners
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 for their families. The recent report from the Ministry of
Tourism
,
for instance
, states that in Maldives
the
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95% of the
work-force
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workforce
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 is
enagaged
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engaged
 in
travel
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 industry as compared to the IT sector.
Besides
,
this
tourism
also
bolster
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 culture and
latest
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 technology exchange,
consequently
; kids from these backward geographies can learn new methods and skills. Despite the merits, there are few de-merits and the most pivotal is the pollution and stress on the limited resources. Because the remote locations have limited parking space and roads are narrow,
as a result
, there are traffic jams,
hence
there
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 harmful gases are
emited
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emitted
.
Furthermore
, during these blockades, drivers press unwanted horns, which induces noise pollution,
which
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and
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 destroys
natural
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 habitat of animals. To summarise, there are always two sides
of
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 the
coins
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coin
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, and the same analogy has been drawn in
tourism
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the tourism
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 industry. Looking at the pros and cons mentioned above, I am inclined to say that
advantages
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 have empowered the disadvantages, and the local bodies can implement
few
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 measures to control and counter
it
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them
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.
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