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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? You should write at least 250 words.

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Nowadays
people
 from all over the world are using their phones, especially social
media
 increasingly which affected their real-life communication. In my point of view, I believe that the advantages of
this
 issue outweigh the disadvantages. The purpose of
this
 essay is to discuss why I am inclined to the positive effects more than the negative ones. On
this
 hand, there is no doubt that social
media
 has some universal drawbacks. One of the key issues of social
media
 is that
people
 are becoming more addicted to it which can result in depression in most cases.
Furthermore
, the internet is separating
people
 and families from each other and no one is making any effort to see their families face-to-face and communicate with each other.
On the other hand
, it is equally important to recognise that social
media
 has numerous benefits that have changed our lives.
For example
, whenever someone is busy and can not visit his family or friends, he can simply call them or text them online in order to keep in touch.
In addition
, it has made it easier to know new friends from different countries and cultures.
Nevertheless
, social
media
 has been really helping
people
 to keep in contact with their family members who live in other countries. A good example of
this
 is provided by students who study abroad, with the internet they could call their relatives and talk with them. In the conclusion,
to sum up
, I would like to reiterate my opinion that the advantages of social
media
 seem to predominate the disadvantages.
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