Recently, the retail company you work for has been losing customers to a competitor. The company is setting up a scheme to encourage customers to stay with the company. Your boss has asked you to write a letter to the customers on your database outlining this customer loyalty scheme. Write the letter to your customers: •describing the benefits for customers of the loyalty scheme • explaining what customers must do to join the scheme • giving details of a special promotion to launch the scheme • reminding customers of the quality of your goods.

Dear Sir My name is Vy. I'm
co-worker
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from the BBC company. I'm writing to let you know that
this
customer loyalty scheme will organize on 23, Mel street
at
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13, march, 2023. I would like to tell you about some benefits
for
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this
program.
Firstly
, we have a new product line and send it to you for trial free.
Besides
that, we have some special gifts for loyal
customers
.
Secondly
, we have a concert for grateful when you stay with us since the company
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business.
This
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celebration
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on and save the memories for us. I would like to overview and give some details
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event
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.
Firstly
, we need to introduce our company.
Secondly
, we have music.
Finnaly
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Finally
, we will talk about a new product line. The new product line will release market on the next month. We would like to bring
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best
for
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customers
and help
customers
to have
better
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life. It's good quality and help
customers
to
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detox and release
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thing from their body. I hope you can join
with
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apply
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us and
i'm
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looking forward to hearing from you. Please let me know
,
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if you join
this
program as I attached
file
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the file
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below. Thanks and regards Vy Nguyen
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