Recently, the retail company you work for has been losing customers to a competitor. The company is setting up a scheme to encourage customers to stay with the company. Your boss has asked you to write a letter to the customers on your database outlining this customer loyalty scheme. Write the letter to your customers: •describing the benefits for customers of the loyalty scheme • explaining what customers must do to join the scheme • giving details of a special promotion to launch the scheme • reminding customers of the quality of your goods.

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Dear Sir My name is Vy. I'm

co-worker

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from the BBC company. I'm writing to let you know that

this

customer loyalty scheme will organize on 23, Mel street

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13, march, 2023. I would like to tell you about some benefits

for

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this

program.

Firstly

, we have a new product line and send it to you for trial free.

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that, we have some special gifts for loyal

customers

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, we have a concert for grateful when you stay with us since the company

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business.

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celeration

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celebration

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on and save the memories for us. I would like to overview and give some details

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event

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Firstly

, we need to introduce our company.

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, we have music.

Finnaly

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Finally

, we will talk about a new product line. The new product line will release market on the next month. We would like to bring

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best

for

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customers

and help

customers

to have

better

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life. It's good quality and help

customers

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detox and release

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thing from their body. I hope you can join

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us and

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looking forward to hearing from you. Please let me know

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if you join

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program as I attached

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below. Thanks and regards Vy Nguyen

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

204 words

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