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Some people think that uniform is a good idea for a company. To what extent do you agree or disgree?

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The line graph illustrates the percentage of Britans in 1992 tuning in to listen to the
radio
 or watch television
througout
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throughout
 the day.
Overall
,
radio
 is the most popular in the mornings
whereas
 television
is prefer
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 in the evenings. More of the population watched TV than listen to the
radio
. Starting at 6am, less than 10 % of those in the UK listen turn their radios on.
This
steeply
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increase
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reaching
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 a peak at 8am with around
one third
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 of the population tuning in.
However
, throughout the day
radio
 listeners
consistenly
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consistently
 decrease, despite slight increases at around 4pm and 10pm with approximately 15% and 7% respectively, trending downwards
though
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through
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 midnight. Television watching fluctuates
increaslingly
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increasingly
increasing
 between 6am and 2pm, before drastically increasing to a high of around 50% at 8pm, which is 20% more than
radio
 listing at its peak. After 8pm a significant decline in those watching
televions
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television
televisions
, ending the same as
radion
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radio
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arund
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around
 5%.
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