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The given bar chart demonstrates the number of
minutes
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 spent on telephone calls in the UK during the 7-year period from 1995 to 2002.All units are measured in billions of
minutes
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 during the whole span,local calls accounted for the longest amount of time
while
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 one ,at least,was all calls from mobiles. In 1995,approximately 70
billion
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minutes
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 of total UK calls were spent on local-fixed lines as opposed to international and mobile ones with 37 and 3
billion
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 respectively.All of the given figures had grown slowly before 1999 when local calls reached the highest point with 90 million
minutes
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 in total.
However
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,calls using mobiles(all calls) were almost 9 times fewer.
Further
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 analyzing the graph,it is seen that after the year 1999,the highest figure started slowly decreasing even though it remained the longest one.In the
last
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 year(2002),the difference between categories was not dramatic with 70
billion
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 for the first one and 60 and 45
billion
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 respectively.
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