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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.
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A glance at the two tables provided reveals some
informations
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 about
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fairtrade-labelled
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fair trade-labelled
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coffe
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coffee
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bababas
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babas
 in five different countries in 1999 and 2004.
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sales
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coffe
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coffee
 in
UK
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 from 1.5
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millions
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euros
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 in 1999 had considerably increased to 20
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 in 2004.
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,Denmark and Sweden during these times had a slightly rose from 1994 to 2004 with 0.2
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.Switzerland and Belgium had a steady
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 in their trends.
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,
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 of bananas in Switzerland had a sharp
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 from 1999 to 2004 with 15
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 to 47
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 respectively.Uk and Belgium meanwhile had a gradually grew during
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 times.One notable point that should be mentioned
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 the second table is that
,
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banana
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 in Sweden and Denmark
has
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a striking similarities
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 in their pattern,they had
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gradually
a gradually
 decline in
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 period by half from 1.8 to 1
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 and 2 to 0.9
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 respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, millions, euros with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade sales
  • significant growth
  • trends and patterns
  • market expansion
  • sustainable consumption
  • ethical products
  • consumer awareness
  • economic impact
  • percentage increase
  • market share
  • profit margins
  • trade initiatives
  • consumer behavior
  • retail figures
  • economic indicators
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