The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon.

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salmons

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life cycle during their life. As it is clear,the process has about 5 stages.

Stating

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from lay on on the reed or stone in upper rivers and finishing

at the first stage

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lay

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laying

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eggs again.Adults salmon,first of all,lay

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an egg

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egg

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eggs

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on reeds or small stones somewhere in

upper

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river that has slow movement.

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TheN

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, after approximately five or six months

babay

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baby

slmon

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salmon

are born. At

this

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stage baby salmon that called Fry and

they

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lenght

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length

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about 3-8 cm long.

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stage,Fry

travel

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travels

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lower

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the lower

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river with fast flowing for approximately

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the next

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4 years.

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this

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period they

have

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become young salmons

that

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named Smolt. During

this

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period they are between 12 and 15 cm.Smolt

imigrate

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immigrates

to open sea for another

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5 years.After 5 years they have become adult salmon and they travel to somewhere in the upper river to lay eggs on stones or reeds.

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cycle will continue during

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all

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life.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.

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5
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
21
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

163 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Life cycle
Spawning
Freshwater
Juvenile
Fry
Adaptation
Migration
Smolt
Rivers
Ocean
Challenge
Growth
Return journey
Hatching ground
Perilous
Upstream
Obstacle
Ecological impact
Preservation
Disturbance

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The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon.

Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The rise of social media has affected personal relationships a society as a whole. Do the advantages of using social for communication outweigh the disadvantages?

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In some places old age is valued, while in other cultures youth is considered more important. Dicuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people think that in order to be successful in business one has to study at university, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.