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Some people think that children should follow their parents’ advice, however, others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #children #parents’ #advice
Some people claim that kids do not know the proper direction to choose,
parents
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 play a role in giving instructions and recommendations to their
children
,
while
 others think that it is not necessary. In
this
 essay, I agree with the topic and I will discuss both views and give my opinions in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, almost
parents
 have been passed through many problems in their lives.
This
 is because they had learnt from the past when they were a child.
As a result
, when they have a child, they offer effective advice to their
children
 and lead them to be a good adult in the future.
For instance
, the
parents
 have good qualities in their life,
this
 is because of hard studying and having a proper education from their
parents
.
Therefore
, they require to do
this
 method with their kids as well.
Consequently
,
children
 can obviously see in their
parents
' life and want to be like them in the right ways.
On the other hand
, if some people are bad guys and give wrong instructions to
children
then
,
children
 follow
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worse
advising
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, leading to
a
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 wrong way.
This
 is
due to
children
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,
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not
sufficient
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 knowledge and experience as much as adults, if they completely trust in wrong recommendations, perhaps they might lead in a dangerous direction.
Therefore
, all of the
parents
' advice is not always correct.
Otherwise
,
children
 should be conscious of
own
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 thinking and logic. In summary, it can be emphasized that despite
children
 believing
parents'
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their parents'
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 instructions, it might be advantages and disadvantages depending on logic. I personally agree with
children
 should follow their
parents
' advice because
parents
 always give benefits direction and opportunities to their
children
.
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