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It is important for children to learn what is right and what is wrong at any early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn the distinction. To what extent do you agree? What sort of punishment should be given?

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It is clear that
 children’s tendency toward misbehaviour should be
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 some penalty for preventing kids from inclining to wrong ways are necessary.
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 issue several steps can be taken. parents or siblings traditionally were an idol for their
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 toddlers still
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 their imitation habits from family members. But nowadays
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mankind’s entire life is changing,
as a
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childrens
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 behaviour and activities are altering. Mass
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adolescents so
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 to inappropriate
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menace
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 daily life.
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unfortunately
 in the present decade many
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youngsters
 commit crimes and one of the main
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 is overlooking penalties.
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the distinction
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of
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 right and wrong
activites
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activities
 should take into account for
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children
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 as adults. In order to deter
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juveniles
 from
commiting
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committing
crime
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 or any misbehaviour during childhood
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 of activities can be taken.
For
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 a teenager who can not manage his individual expenditure and
wasting
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 money, his
accessibilty
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accessibility
 to money should be
limitted
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limited
. schools should have severe
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 about using drugs in
highschools
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high schools
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 like preventing the
offender
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offenders
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 students to stay among
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others.
To sum up
, knowing what is correct and what is false has a central role in
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therefore
i
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belive
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believe
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 that there
are
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shoud
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should
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those who
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 are taking steps in
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the wrong
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ways
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.
in addition
 to
put
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 a tackle on
this
issue
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 some steps can be taken as mentioned before in the essay.
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