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Topic Vocabulary:
  • full-time education
  • qualifications
  • social inequalities
  • academic paths
  • disengaged
  • drop-out rates
  • workforce
  • skilled workforce
  • knowledge-based economy
  • career decisions
  • psychological effects
  • mental health issues
  • a diverse range of
  • mandatory education
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