IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern life. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
In recent years, the issue of
convenience
Use synonyms
foods
Use synonyms
 has been brought to the public attention. Some
people
Use synonyms
 put forward the idea that
convenience
Use synonyms
foods
Use synonyms
 have helped
people
Use synonyms
 keep up with the speed of modern life.
Nevertheless
Linking Words
, those
people
Use synonyms
 who are opposed to it hold the view that
convenience
Use synonyms
foods
Use synonyms
 have many
disadvantages
Use synonyms
. Taking both sides of the argument into the consideration, I am of the opinion that the advantages of
convenience
Use synonyms
foods
Use synonyms
 do not outweigh the
disadvantages
Use synonyms
. My arguments for
this
Linking Words
 point are listed in the following.
First,
Linking Words
the benefits of the rise of
convenience
Use synonyms
foods
Use synonyms
 are that
people
Use synonyms
 can have a meal at a lower cost and consume less
time
Use synonyms
 to finish the meal. Taking Hong Kong
people
Use synonyms
 as an example,
people
Use synonyms
 working in Hong Kong are very busy. They do not have much
time
Use synonyms
 to take rest. The appearance of
convenience
Use synonyms
foods
Use synonyms
 helps them to save more
time
Use synonyms
 on having a meal. It allows Hong Kong workers not to have to
wait
Add the preposition
forwait
show examples
 a seat in the restaurant anymore. Buying an instant noodle or calling Foodpanda to deliver the food directly to your office or your home can save more
time
Use synonyms
. Despite
this
Linking Words
, there are a lot of
disadvantages
Use synonyms
 of
convenience
Use synonyms
foods
Use synonyms
. As we mentioned above,
convenience
Use synonyms
foods
Use synonyms
 like instant noodles, cans or fast food are not healthy at all. Research repeatedly suggests that instant noodles contain too many unhealthy chemicals
such
Linking Words
 as sodium, fat and oil. Long-term applications
convenience
Use synonyms
foods
Use synonyms
 can cause a lot of chronic diseases and can harm our bodies.
Besides
Linking Words
, the package of
convenience
Use synonyms
foods
Use synonyms
 contains a large amount of plastic. Plastic is an unenvironmental substance which is very difficult to break down.
Therefore
Linking Words
, there are more
disadvantages
Use synonyms
 to the rise of
convenience
Use synonyms
foods
Use synonyms
. In conclusion, I hold an unshakable view that the advantages do not outweigh the
disadvantages
Use synonyms
.
Convenience
Use synonyms
foods
Use synonyms
 help
people
Use synonyms
 to have more
time
Use synonyms
 on working, those are the advantages. Yet,
convenience
Use synonyms
foods
Use synonyms
 could
also
Linking Words
 lead to a serious environmental problem and have a bad effect on
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
human health condition. After all, it is high
time
Use synonyms
 that we stopped or reduced the use of
convenience
Use synonyms
foods
Use synonyms
. It is in no way a good thing.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: