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Today, many people spend less and less time at their home. What’s the reason for it? What are the effects of this trend on individuals and society?

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There is no denying that spending
time
 at
home
 is
essential
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 aspect to recharge and rest after
busy
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a busy
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 long day.
However
, in recent years there has been
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growth
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 quantity of people who prefer to spend their leisure
time
 outside,
due to
increased
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avialibility
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availability
 of entertaining stuff. Some
arguing
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 that spending
time
 at
home
 is
neccessery
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necessary
,
while
 others argue that spending
time
 outside is beneficial for society and
individuals
. First and foremost, after exhausting
common
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the common
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 weekday is important to go
home
, but many people want to go to the bar or
pubs
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 to relax and have fun. For most
of
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the people
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people
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this
 type of spending
time
 is pleasurable.
in addition
, today exist
a
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plenty of attractive entertaining night clubs which become very successful among all
of
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the
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age groups. So
individuals
 like to entertain
themselve
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themselves
 outside
instead
 of going
home
.
On the other
hand
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 there are drawbacks which can have
harmful
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a harmful
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effect
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effects
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 on
individuals
. If
persons
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people
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 too often go to
the
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cafes and bars in the evenings, it can lead to overspending financial resources.
Furthermore
,
this
 type of leisure
time
 can lead to
shortage
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 of sleep, which in turn can have poor performance at work. In conclusion, in modern
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community
cummunity
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 it has been increasingly popular to entertain outside, for variety of reasons and it displays both advantages and disadvantages for
individuals
 and society
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