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Universities should accept equal numbers of men and women in every subject.

It is more and more frequently debated about universities sould accept male and female in equal numbers in every
subjects
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. Generally, in most countries around the world, there are not legal limit selecting
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 in university studies and the choice should be made based on personal talent or desires. Admittedly, people of either sex do better in certain professions and
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, many universities believe it is right to reserve specific
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 for male and female respectively. In fact, some professions seems to be best practicted by
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 other by
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 but,
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 is not enough to impose quotas based on gender.
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,
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 are expected to be more passionate and calm;
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, courses
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 as nursing and teaching young children are exclusively reserved for them.
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,
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on the other hand
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, are physically stronger than
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 and enrolled in
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 that require more physical effort and strength as part of their job duties.
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,
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 is not always true and, once again, cannot be the criteria for gender biased admissions in colleges. In modern world
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 and
women
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 can do the same studies and works in the same best way.
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,
women
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 can study and work in fields that in the past were reserved for
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: medicine, engineering, law, police, astronaut, etc.
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,
men
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 can do jobs that were once almost exclusively female: nurse, teacher, etc. In conclusion, in my opinion universities must not reserve quotas based on gender but every person must be able to choose the preferred
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 and,
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, their own work.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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