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Some people prefer to work in the same type of job throughout their lifetime while others like to change the type of job they do. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It has been argued by many individuals that
people
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work
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 in the same field which they are doing
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their
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 past time,
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 opponents reckon that alteration in occupation is
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essential. I favour the former perspective;
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,
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 a reasoned conclusion. On the one hand, the fundamental benefit of doing
job
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 in the same domain throughout their lifetime is that commoners might earn huge
amount
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amounts
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 of capital. The majority of human beings have been successful in their life as they do
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 regularly in
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one sector as employers enhance their income yearly.
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, they do not leave their job.
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, a survey conducted by Harward University revealed that in India 75% of the
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personnel
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 in
thier
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their
 department because they have fully satisfied.
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, I favour the same.
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, the prominent advantage of changing jobs which the public
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is that humans may not only proliferate experience but
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 communication skills. When
people
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 replace their job, they would acquire different types of techniques
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 as team spirit, increase
confidence
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 level and many more things because they meet new labours after
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 their
work
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, it is published article by The Tribune newspaper showed that approximately 45% of employees are changing field of the
work
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they want to learn the latest knowledge and how to talk with strangers.
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,
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people
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work
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 experience and
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 skills, I personally believe that
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 can get
massive
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sum
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 of
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money, so they do not change their posts.
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