The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the proportion of sports by females and males on a regular basis in 2010. The comparison was made
according to
their age
ranges, namely 15 to 24, 25 to 34, 35 to 44, 45 to 54, 55 to 64, and 65 and over.
Looking from an overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that females are generally more active than males. Moreover
, the widest disparity between the activity of men and women was in their 35-44 age
.
According to
the chart, both genders do approximately the same amount of sports in the given year when they were 65 years old and more. (The proportion was 45%) The only age
group in that men are more active than women was 15 to 24 and the percentages are roughly 52% and 47% respectively. This
age
range was also
the time period when males are the most sportive in general. Women have the most tendency to move between 45 and 54 ages, while
they were the least sportive after the age
of 65.Submitted by emineknc on
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