Today, many people do not know their neighbors. Why is this? What can be done about this?

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, it was significantly changed after the COVID issue,
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online order grocery rather go to the shop ,
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getting food delivery rather than go out to enjoy food in restaurants as well, so that proves that there are several of reasons made public’s life habits changes and miss out the chance to bonding with their neighbourhood.
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community mentality changed , they are more emphasise their own privacy more than greeting or willing to have a connection with their neighbours, which they might think is not necessary,
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they might have a chance to greeting and bonding to their neighbours in the lift , at the garden or at the balcony,
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not to, most of them just focus on their phone and without any eye contact to another. In my opinion, I think
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because privacy
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to them. In conclusion , many
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not know their neighbours
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choice for several reasons because they do not want to,
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they are focusing themselves more than another,
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in modern mindset been changed , folk think time matters to them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • community engagement
  • social isolation
  • neighborhood watch
  • local initiatives
  • virtual interaction
  • privacy concerns
  • resident mobility
  • technological advancements
  • social media influence
  • work-life balance
  • busy personal schedules
  • community events
  • local residents
  • social interaction
  • community ties
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