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Today, many people do not know their neighbors. Why is this? What can be done about this?

#people #neighbors
In the modern world, technology big impact
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 lives,
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 changing human behaviour and routine base on
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 two main reasons below
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, it was significantly changed after the COVID issue,
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family
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 worked from home
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 online order grocery rather go to the shop ,
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 most popular society changed their food habits, and more
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 getting food delivery rather than go out to enjoy food in restaurants as well, so that proves that there are several of reasons made public’s life habits changes and miss out the chance to bonding with their neighbourhood.
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, comparing age to nowadays modern life, it is a big impact
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 community mentality changed , they are more emphasise their own privacy more than greeting or willing to have a connection with their neighbours, which they might think is not necessary,
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 they might have a chance to greeting and bonding to their neighbours in the lift , at the garden or at the balcony,
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 they
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 not to, most of them just focus on their phone and without any eye contact to another. In my opinion, I think
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because privacy
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 to them. In conclusion , many
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do
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 not know their neighbours
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choice for several reasons because they do not want to,
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they are focusing themselves more than another,
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 in modern mindset been changed , folk think time matters to them.
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