Today, many people do not know their neighbors. Why is this? What can be done about this?

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getting food delivery rather than go out to enjoy food in restaurants as well, so that proves that there are several of reasons made public’s life habits changes and miss out the chance to bonding with their neighbourhood.

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Topic Vocabulary:

community engagement
social isolation
neighborhood watch
local initiatives
virtual interaction
privacy concerns
resident mobility
technological advancements
social media influence
work-life balance
busy personal schedules
community events
local residents
social interaction
community ties

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Today, many people do not know their neighbors. Why is this? What can be done about this?

Fully explain your ideas

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

Robots and artificial intelligence are being developed to replace human in workplace. Why is this happening? Do you think this will have positive or negative impact on society?

Some people think that art is an essential subject for children at school while others think that it’s a waste of time. Discuss both sides of question!

As life expectancy is increasing, people work after retirement with pay. Alternatively, some people start to work at a young age. Are these positive or negative impacts?