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Illiteracy continues to be a concern for many countries in the world today. What are the causes of illiteracy in the modern world, and what effects does it have on the people concerned and on society as a whole?

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Having difficulty with reading and writing is a great concern, especially in the modern world where it is defined as the informational era. There seem to be two main causes and three effects, which we will discuss here. The main cause is probably the lack of awareness
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 the importance of
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 misconception might be common among illiterate parents who think that
education
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 won't guarantee job security and there are jobs that can be done without needing any formal
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 as farm helper, dishwasher, etc. The second key cause is, I believe, poverty. Unfortunately, only some of us are lucky enough to not worry about our next meal, and for the
rest
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education
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 becomes less crucial than something that might fill
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 stomach. Regarding the effects
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 be felt by employers, perhaps the main impact is on the economy. Today's minimum
requirements
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requirement
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 at work are ability to communicate with other workers freely.
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, a less competent
labor
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 force results in less output, which leads to stagnate future growth or even
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the
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 total gross domestic
products
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product
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.
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, these illiterate people can be easily replaced by
machineries
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, which pushes them into poverty.
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, the most harmful effect is if the proper measures are not taken,
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 the chain will be continued down to the next generation.
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, the causes of
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 trend are primarily to do with
lack
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 of
education
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 among kids
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 growing up, and the effects result negatively
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 the present and future of the country.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Literacy
  • Illiteracy
  • Poverty
  • Access
  • Educational resources
  • Social inequality
  • Discrimination
  • Gender disparity
  • Racial bias
  • Cultural norms
  • Technological advances
  • Political instability
  • Disruption
  • Education systems
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Job prospects
  • Health implications
  • Self-esteem
  • Empowerment
  • Economic growth
  • Social cohesion
  • Civic participation
  • Democratic processes
  • Exclusion
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