The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.

The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California

and the rest of the world.
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Avoidance
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is an outcome of the struggle. As a reaction to struggle people start to avoid Whatever
trigger
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their distressing feelings and thoughts. As much as
avoidance
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gives short-term relief, its long-term result is more and more struggle, that’s because
avoidance
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takes you away from the
life
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you value the most into a
life
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of restrictions. And the reason that people keep doing the
avoidance
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strategy is that they don’t want to face the truth, the hard truth, which is, feeling anxious even if it was more than you can bear, sometimes it is a normal human process. The antidote for
this
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behaviour is being accepted and compassionate with yourself. Let’s say that anxiety is not a normal feeling and that no one should ever feel it, would you let it take over your
life
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? Knowing that fighting back will not work and even make the problem worse? Of
course
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the answer would be no, that’s why being accepting will make you live the
life
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you value knowing that these emotions are part of your
life
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. And the way to do
that is
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by watching your thoughts and allowing yourself to feel whatever you feel without any resistance and
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, you will have room for it.
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, you will have the energy to focus on your
life
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. In the end, we all suffer. And the things that we care about are largely connected to our suffering.
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, you can liberate yourself from suffering by living in an accepted and defused way, and seeing your
life
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as an unfolding process, that evolves as you move. Remember that nobody chooses to have anxiety or depression but you can choose how to approach them.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words avoidance, life with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • households
  • significant
  • industrial use
  • implications
  • agriculture
  • geographical
  • climatic
  • economic factors
  • patterns
  • sustainability
  • practices
  • surprising
  • exceptionally
  • improvements
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