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The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarize this information by selecting and reporting the main feautures and make comparison where relevant.

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarize this information by selecting and reporting the main feautures and make comparison where relevant.
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The line graph and table illustrate the average
temperature
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 in a month and the annual numbers of sunshine in
London
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, New
York
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, and
Sydney
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.
Overall
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, the
temperature
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 of New
York
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 City and
London
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 are similar decreasing in the winter months and increasing in the summer,
while
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 the
Sydney
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temperature
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 declined in the summer.
According to
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 the table, New
York
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 has the most sunshine
days
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. The
temperature
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 in New
York
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 and
London
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 started at around 4 degrees and 8 degrees respectively with a slow rising until reaching around a quarter in July.
Then
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 these figures fell gradually to the start point in December.
In contrast
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,
Sydney
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days
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 are significantly warmer in January and
then
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 decline to 15 degrees in July. After that, the average
temperature
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 rises to hit a quarter in December. New
York
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 has the biggest numbers for shining
days
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 accounting for 2535 hours per year and
Sydney
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 has 2473 shiny hours. In comparison,
London
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 has the least sunshine
days
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 making up only 1180 hours.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature, london, york, sydney, days with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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