More and more people are opting for readymade food instead of freshly cooked food. Does this practice has more advantages than disadvantages? Discuss.

The phenomenon of some
people
think
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that readymade
food
would completely replace
the
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freshly cooked
food
as our normal diet has aroused wide concern among various circles. Divergent as
people
's views on
this
issue in question may be, I personally believe that
this
living pattern would bring us more
disadvantage
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than
benfits
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benefits
benefit
. Regarding the benefits of
this
eating pattern, the most noticeable one is that it is
prefectly
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perfectly
suitable for
the
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people
who live in the central cities in the modern world. To illustrate, the living
pace
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of central cities
usually
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faster than other regions because they are the
finanical
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financial
centre of their countries.
Therefore
, most
people
are busy
on
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daily work, some of them even without
anytime
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for rest or
meal
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. Readymade
food
would help those folks to have
regular
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diet again since
the
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just need a few
minuutes
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minutes
to heat up the
food
, which is much faster than cooking from the beginning. Despite the aforementioned benefit, I still believe that
people
should not rely on
the
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instant
food
because of several drawbacks, probably the most significant one is that it would jeopardize our
humans
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bodies.
For example
, most readymade
food
need
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to
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be conserva
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conserva
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conserved
for a long period of time,
hence
, different kinds of chemical will be added
into
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food
during the production process.
Those chemical composition
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will be absorbed and remained by our body after consumption. If the amount of those
composition
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is over the limitation of our bodies, some side-effection will start to show and the chance of getting specific
diseasses
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diseases
disease
will be increased
such
as cancer. Under
this
line of thinking, it seems to me that
although
instant
food
is convenient for the city
people
, the damages
that
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created by
this
diet habit
are
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should not be overlooked. So, I believe that there are more disadvantages.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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