Social media websites have amused large user bases. Do the advantages of being a part of social media outweigh the disadvantages?
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websites, Correct determiner usage
these
however
, there are some negative impacts in the missusing
of them. In Correct your spelling
misusing
this
essay, I would metion
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mention
advantages
and disadvantages of using these platforms.
To commence with, Correct article usage
the advantages
firstly
, a lot of people have many opportunities to show themselves or their services and goods to others, for example
selling their arts
and painting without having any special galleries or showing their acts and abilities to become famous. In continue, for the second advantage, I can mention making hobbies for elder people, Fix the agreement mistake
art
for instance
, grand parents
can spend their time Correct your spelling
grandparents
by
watching funny video clips and get amused. Change preposition
apply
Thirdly
, everyone can read news in
social media and be up-to-date about events around the world.
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On the other hand
, in order to disadvantages
of social Correct article usage
the disadvantages
media
I can notice some reasons, as a shining example health problems are the biggest Add a comma
,media
crisises
that you can see in people who watch these websites. either physical or mental problems. Staying inactive makes everyone sick, Correct your spelling
crisis
such
as heart
and brain diseases and obesity or depressing as Change preposition
with heart
a
mental Correct article usage
apply
injouries
. Correct your spelling
injuries
Wasing
time is one other bad effect, in fact, you do not achieve Correct your spelling
Wasting
to
any important thing if you see a funny video clip, in Change preposition
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other word
, you Change the wording
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other words
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loose
your life and gain nothing.
In conclusion, online social pages have some positive and negative points in our Replace the word
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life
and we must manage them to use Replace the word
lives
its
benefits without Correct pronoun usage
their
loosing
anything.Replace the word
losing
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