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Some people say that companies should allow their employees to dress casually. Do you agree or disagree with this?

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Most
people
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 think that they should wear a formal
dress
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 when going to
work
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.
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, some
people
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 argue that
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companies should let their employees
dress
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 casually. For some
people
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, wearing a formal outfit can express who they are, but others think that wearing casual clothes can make
one
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 feel more comfortable and could excel in their ability to
work
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.
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, I disagree with the idea that comfortable
dress
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 should be allowed.
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 with, formal
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such
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 as blouses or trousers can help individuals prepare for
work
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, not only visibly but
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 in invisible ways.
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, when we have to attend a conference with our business counterparts, wearing a formal outfit will make
one
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 seem more professional.
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, working in uniform will help colleagues easily distinguish
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's role by recognizing what they are wearing.
On the contrary
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, some
people
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 insist that employees should be allowed to wear what they want. From
this
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 point of view, the effectiveness of the
work
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 does not rely on their outfit but on
one
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's ability to handle the situation. In summer,
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,
people
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 who are wearing shorts may feel more comfortable
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 and
therefore
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 can concentrate on their
work
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 more intensely.
This
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 could lead to better outcomes. In summary, formal
dress
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 can be used as an effective tool by representing
one
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's role in the company.
On the other hand
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, informal
dress
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 can heighten the efficiency of
work
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 by letting
people
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 feel more comfortable
while
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 they are working. I predict wearing formal outfits will help
people
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work
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 more efficiently without explaining themselves,
therefore
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 they should not wear
casual
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dress
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 to
work
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.
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