A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Looking at the task below, it's evident the way in which two different views make space between them, giving the opportunity to think and admit a personal idea, after having made a comparison and clear sentence between the first two views. Despite the fact that
animals
have always been a good
Human's
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friend, in some cases, years ago or still nowadays, some
people
have or continue to adopt
animals
to exploit them,
for instance
when
people
adopt dogs as guardians of their villas or houses,
as well as
some
people
, decide to let their
animals
to
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partecipe
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participate
at some competitions to earn some money, without giving a minimum importance for what can be the needs of that animal. In comparison, some
others
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people
treat
animals
as family members, making sure to satisfy their various needs (when it is possible),
such
as uses for food and research, and
as
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last
not
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but not
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at
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least,
give
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full attention and love. In my personal opinion, despite the fact that I'm not a big friend of
animals
,
duo
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to several reasons that happened in the past and still are
a
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big traumas for me,
I'm concur
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with the second view of the task, because I believe that
animals
should have the same right and attentions as humans.
To sum up
, with what has already been stated and compared, it's important to highlight that
animals
are in
this
world not to be a slave, but to be a part of it;
Therefore
,
although
animals
are speechless,
this
does not mean that they should be devoid of love,
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attention
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and care.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Exploitation
  • Animal welfare
  • Ethical treatment
  • Vegetarianism
  • Veganism
  • Cognitive dissonance
  • Humane
  • Live stock
  • Cruelty-free
  • Bioethics
  • Conservation
  • Habitat preservation
  • Ecosystem
  • Biodiversity
  • Animal testing
  • Synthetic biology
  • Genetic engineering
  • Speciesism
  • Animal husbandry
  • Sustainable farming
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