One of your neighbor’s children has accidentally broken the front window of your car. You should write a letter to his/her parents and in your letter you should • introduce yourself • explain how it happened • and what they should do.

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My name is Teens Potsy, your next-door neighbour and I am writing to inform you that your son, Timmy, accidentally broke the front passenger window of my brand new Volks Wagon Golf

while

playing cricket yesterday afternoon. As you know it is rainy season now and

this

also

affects the situation since I am not able to use the car because of the broken window. Hopefully, your car insurance will cover the damage. Please check with them to see if it can

cover

Wrong verb form

be covered

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. If so, please inform me in time. Perhaps we could meet

this

Sunday afternoon to discuss our options. In case you are not available at that time please let me know so that we would be able to make an appointment for some other time. Thank you in advance for your kind. Yours Sincerely, Teens Potsy

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task response

The letter generally responds to the task by introducing the writer, explaining the situation, and suggesting a course of action. The expression of politeness could be improved to increase appropriateness.

coherence cohesion

The logical structure of the letter is generally clear, with a proper introduction and explanation. However, the greeting and closing could be improved for better formality and politeness.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

139 words

6.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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One of your neighbor’s children has accidentally broken the front window of your car. You should write a letter to his/her parents and in your letter you should • introduce yourself • explain how it happened • and what they should do.

The Greeting

Nowadays more and more older people who need employment have to compete with younger people for the same jobs. What problems does this cause? What are the solutions?

In today’s world, it’s private companies rather than government pay for and conduct most scientific research. Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

The internet provides us with info about life and cultures of different countries and some say it is not necessary to visit them to learn about them. Agree or disagree?