when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family?

In

this

Linking Words

modern era, the elderly tend to live with other old

people

Use synonyms

in an elder care facility with nurses available to look after them.

Linking Words

This

Change the determiner

This facility

These facilities

show examples

facilities

Use synonyms

definitely need money to keep

services

Use synonyms

running and most likely the source of

Use synonyms

Add an article

the fund

show examples

fund

Fix the agreement mistake

funds

show examples

comes from the

government

Use synonyms

. Others suggest that the families of these elders are the ones who are responsible for the fees. There are valid opinions on both sides which I will explain below. First of all, most

people

Use synonyms

believe that the

government

Use synonyms

should provide good

facilities

Use synonyms

for elders. The funding for these

services

Use synonyms

is from the

retirement

Use synonyms

fund

Use synonyms

that had collected by the

government

Use synonyms

when these elders still working at younger ages. The

retirement

Use synonyms

fund

Use synonyms

should be invested in safe instruments so that when the old workers have to retire, they can enjoy their life with the deposit money.

Furthermore

Linking Words

, the

retirement

Use synonyms

treasury is not the only source of

services

Use synonyms

, but

also

Linking Words

from the taxes collected by the

government

Use synonyms

.

For instance

Linking Words

, the

government

Use synonyms

should be able to calculate the budget for elder

cares

Fix the agreement mistake

care

show examples

, which

Linking Words

also

Add a missing verb

is also

show examples

considered

as

Change preposition

apply

show examples

the citizen of the country.

Moreover

Linking Words

, the authority should pay for these

services

Use synonyms

since it is mandatory for them to take care of their

people

Use synonyms

. Older

people

Use synonyms

have done a lot for the development of their country and the

government

Use synonyms

should thank them for providing a good place to live. Imagine if these elderly had done various jobs for the country when they were young and they

also

Linking Words

had paid their taxes, but in the

end

Add a comma

,end

show examples

they are abandoned by the

government

Use synonyms

when they are old. It is very cruel for the old

people

Use synonyms

since they

also

Linking Words

have the right to a better life.

To conclude

Linking Words

, I believe

government

Use synonyms

should provide

facilities

Use synonyms

to

the

Correct article usage

apply

show examples

old

people

Use synonyms

where they can live properly and not worry about

such

Linking Words

accommodations. The

facilities

Use synonyms

should be paid by the funds that have been invested from the

retirement

Use synonyms

fund

Use synonyms

so it would not cause any financial issues.