In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is considered very important. Why might this be the case? Is this a positive or negative development?

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In some cultures, owning a

house

is a prominent purpose for

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group

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of folks and they prefer to purchase a

house

rather than being

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a tenant

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tenant

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. I see

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as a logical decision and in

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I will scrutinize various angles of

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concept. To commence with, if someone has enough

money

to buy a

house

it will be so beneficial to do that

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for example

he will not pay extra

money

to someone else as rent and he can save

this

money

and use it for other purposes and

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the only benefit,

also

by purchasing a

house

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in some significant class of assets with the tiny amount of depreciation that can be sold and change to cash in a short time.

on the other hand

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the price of houses grow Every year in most countries and that makes buying a

house

a smart choice.

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people can adopt

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approach as a shield

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against

inflation to save their capital.

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those who probably do not have enough

money

for owning a

house

can get

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loan from banks and pay

installments

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rather than paying the

money

as rent

and

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the bright side is that they will be

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the owner

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owner

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of the

house

at the end

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and they

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pay anymore. All in all my bias on

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is obvious and I am one of the

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this

idea.

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the

endeavors

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of some groups for being

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an owner

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owner

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rather than paying rent is comprehensible and in a financial

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it can be known as the most general and feasible financial decision all around the world.

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