The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030
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The given graph provides information about the
amount
of consumption and prediction of
energy
in the USA over the time period 5 decades, starting from 1980 till 2030.
Overall
, all
energy
sources
have experienced an upward trend,
whereas
fossil
sources
have more
amount
than renewable
sources
.
Also
, fossil
sources
dramatically
increase
, and the petrol-oil sector uses mostly.
However
, renewable
sources
increase
bit by bit. When we look at the fossil
energy
sources
consumption
amount
in detail, the
amount
of petrol was 35
quadrillion
units
in 1980, and it
increase
sharply to reach about 42
quadrillion
units
in 2020. It will peak
to
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approximately 50
quadrillion
units
in 2030 by guesses. Coal and natural gas were 15
quadrillion
units
and 20
quadrillion
units
respectively in 1980. In 2013, both
energy
sources
amount
were the same
that
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is about 22
quadrillion
units
. End of the given time period, the coal consumption rate will be more than the natural gas rate which is almost 30
quadrillion
units
and 25
quadrillion
units
respectively. When we look at renewable
sources
in detail. all
energy
use rates were the same which is less than 5
quadrillion
units
in 1980. In 1995, the solar/wind number was more than hydropower.
However
, in 2010, hydropower was the
least used
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energy
source and solar/wind
energy
sources
were the second place. These
source's
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sources'
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rates will not change by 2030 by guesses,
while
nuclear
sources
increase
a bit and it will continue at the same rate
that
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is more than 5
quadrillion
units
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, that is".
Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, energy, sources, increase, quadrillion, units with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Renewable resources
  • Non-renewable resources
  • Fossil fuels
  • Nuclear power
  • Hydroelectric power
  • Solar energy
  • Wind energy
  • Biomass
  • Consumption patterns
  • Technological advancements
  • Energy efficiency
  • Sustainable development
  • Carbon footprint
  • Energy policy
  • Projections
  • Decade
  • Significant shifts
  • Economic factors
  • Environmental impact
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