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In some countries,owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why migh this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation ?

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In the world, there are countries, which are better at owning a
home
 rather than renting.
This
 fact is very important for people who live.
Also
,
this
 might be the case and we will explain whether it's a positive or negative situation in the essay. Explaining, buying a
home
 rather than renting we do see two sides to it.
Firstly
,
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a community
the community
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community
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communities
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 who are travelling from their own country to another country
to
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get PR and settle down by selling their entire properties and lands .We strongly believed people who stepped
for
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this
 ladder
they
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should buy a
home
 rather than waste money on renting out apartments,studios or houses.
Secondly
,
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People
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 who are going abroad to complete only their studies and heading back from the place they came it's completely fine to rent an apartment rather than
buying
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 a house.
Thirdly
,looking,at both positive and negative we would choose the positive side of it.The reasons for choosing the positive side of
this
 case, have been explained in the second paragraph.
This
 explains,two benefits when you buy a house and how it's changed your life
also
, on
other
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hands
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hand
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,explains when you rent out a place.
Overall
,owning a
home
 or renting is very much important
due to
 personal perspectives. Especially when we decided to go abroad and make our future
the
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better.
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