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Some say that university students should pay the full cost of their studies because higher education only benefits the students and not the society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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These days more and more, universities are offering scholarships and funds for
students
 to be able to enrol in the programs
instead
 of letting the
students
 cover all the tuition fees.
However
, some people believe that it is not useful for the community.
This
 essay will support my opinion that it is more beneficial to fund the
students
 for their studies.
This
 notion will be examined through an analysis of time and money. Regarding time, the student who going to have higher education is considered as an investment of themselves for society to learn and investigate new things. Specifically, they are spending years doing research on a specific topic and trying new techniques to help the world to solve it. An example of
this
 can be seen in postgraduate
students
 finding a new solution for global warming,
as a result
, they will spend time working on it. In terms of money, there are many
students
 who want to continue
further
 studies but unfortunately, they cannot afford the tuition fees that’s why universities are providing to pay for their fees.
In particular
, the fresh graduate
students
 did not start their careers and did not earn money yet. One particular instance of
this
 comes from the
students
 who are not working, and do not have a second source of funds. In conclusion, universities providing scholarships for
students
 is considered a great opportunity for many
students
 to discover more solutions for the world, to be able to help society with it, and to that will inspire the next generation to continue.
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