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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #professionals #doctors #engineers #work #country
Many opinions agree that it is important for experts namely doctors and engineers devote their
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 the country in which they used to train . Meanwhile , others argue that they should be given chance to work
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everywhere they want . On the one hand , working in
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 familiar country that witnessed the development of skills brings some advantages . When
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 are trained carefully in a good environment , they will have many opportunities which help them to promote quickly .
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the resident
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 may know easily about
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 whose enormous reputations with anything they have done for different aspects .
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 , Dr Xuan Kien
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finished completely a five years training course
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HaNoi
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Hanoi
 Medical University . After that ,
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 good knowledge and significant fame , he established a medical centre
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there . Up to now , he has received many successes . On the other faces ,
it is clear that
 when outstanding people decide to work in some place that they feel comfortable
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 convenient , there are many positive chances for them . Perhaps , the biggest benefit is taking a lot of useful experiences from countries whose better development . So they would have many right ways to upgrade themselves , identify strengths and remove negative faces to improve
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 and make it better than ever .
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 with high-level people and learn about strong points from them , these would help too much for their present career and future . Both viewpoints still give professionals different useful solutions . From my point of view , it is suitable for people to work
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anywhere they feel free and flexible
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 their career . Because works depend mostly on personal circumstance and condition .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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