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An American writer think that tomorrow is more important. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#american #writer #tomorrow
One
 American author
conciders
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considers
 tomorrow
being
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 more important. I find his words reasonable, but I do not fully agree with
it
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them
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.  On
one
 hand, I can clearly understand what is the main idea of
this
 quote. Probably, It's about the fact that our future is more important than the present
moment
.
Hence
, we should always consider the consequences of our actions. Of course, no sane person would do something that dangerous to destroy
one
's future. But I do agree that more people should dig deeper before doing anything, as
one
's actions may have delayed
outcome
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outcomes
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as well as
 momentary
effect
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effects
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.
On the other hand
,
such
 a creed is not so good for a living. Every day you wake up is today. If you
continue
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 delay your life thinking that tomorrow is always more important, there is a big chance that tomorrow will never happen.
Moreover
, we have nothing but
a
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 present
moment
. People who do not live in the
moment
 and
always
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 disturbed about what's in
store
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 are more likely going to get depressed as they not really living their lives. So it's necessary to fully live every
moment
 you got.
Consequently
, everyone should try to keep balance. Living in the
moment
 will be
senceless
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senseless
 if you never report
yourself
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apply
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of
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the consequences of your actions.
As well as
there
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they're
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not
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is not
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 so much meaning in living for something you will never see. Because all we have is time for ourselves.
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